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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how many people living in city areas in the
world
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 and five parts of the
world
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 in 1950, 2007, and 2030. In 1950, the
world
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's city population was 29%, which considerably increased to 49% in 2007 and will continue up to 60% until 2030.
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, the people who lived in Africa and Asia in 1950 were similar, with only 15% and 17%, respectively, which is almost twice
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than
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 that in the
world
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. After that, the figure for these two areas rocketed by 22% and 24%, respectively, and
be
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is
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 predicted to
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 than 50% in 2030.
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, the data for the proportion of Europe, Latin
America
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, and North
America
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 were all higher than that in the
world
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. The percentage of North American took the leading position since 1950 to 2030. As for Latin
America
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, the proportion experienced a high rate before 2007, with a 34% rise taking the second position.
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, the proportion of people living in urban areas in Africa and Asia is lower than the
world
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 average,
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 that of Europe, Latin
America
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, and North
America
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 is much higher than average.
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