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You have had a problem with your next-door neighbour. You have not been able to speak to your neighbour about this. Write a letter to this neighbour. In your letter • Explain the problem Suggest a solution • Say what action you will take if the situation does not improve

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LETTER 📨 Dear Mr Jackson. I am writing
this
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problem
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the problem
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about
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of
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 the noise which is being
listened
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heard
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 us from your house. Mr Jackson, I know
about
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that
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 your son is
practicing
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practising
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 on his guitar every day. But at night he
do
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 not have to work. That instrument's voice is very
loudly
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loud
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and
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so we can not sleep normally.
As a
result
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result,
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 we have a
stong
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strong
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 headache.
I
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 was not possible to
say
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tell
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 him about it. I thought he would
sad
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be sad
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 with me. But today I decided to tell you
this
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 big problem. Please, will you try to persuade him that play his guitar at
the
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school or
other
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another
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 place? I have a second idea. He can practice from morning to midday but not
at
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 the evening. I understand
you
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it will not be easy.
However
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 I and my family need to stop
lack
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the lack
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 of sleeping time. If you can not do
this
 mission, I will speak with your child. Even I can offer so much money to him or I may
be
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make him upset. Because I have not any way to agree with your son. Please I depend
to
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on
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 your help. I look forward to
hear
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hearing
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a good news
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 from you.
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 sincerely. Jennie 2️⃣0️⃣8️⃣words
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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your letter more logically. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to clearly present your points and include suggestions for making improvements.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone as this involves a complaint to your neighbor.
task achievement
You provided a clear explanation of the problem and suggested possible solutions.
coherence cohesion
You included appropriate greetings and a closing statement.
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