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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .
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comparison
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 of
emissions
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 person between 1967 and 2007 in the United
Kingdom
,Sweden,Italy and Portugal. As we can notice from the graph,in spite of the fact that
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 of
United
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Kingdom
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 downwards,
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 carbon dioxide
emissions
 of
United
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Kingdom
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 the highest as in 1967,as in 2007. Back to the details,it is obvious that there were
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quite good trends between 1967 and 1977.We can see
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 tendency of
United
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Kingdom
,
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 Sweden’s
emissions
 and
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 two countries Italy and Portugal.
However
,after 1977,there
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 of the first two countries.We may notice that
emissions
 of carbon dioxide in
United
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 States dropped gradually,
while
emissions
 in Sweden decreased dramatically,despite the fact that there was a growth at the beginning. It is noticeable that Italy and Sweden never had downwards,but
emissions
 in metric tonnes never were more than eight
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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