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Some people think that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writings can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play important roles. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that hardcopy materials are no longer essential as
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e-
books
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 can be stored in the digital machine
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 others think that they still play vital roles. I believe in
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 level of technology, printed
books
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 should not be used.
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, printed
books
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helps
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 the reader to use them anywhere globally despite the absence of electricity since they do not use power to function. Most communities especially in the upcountry side prefer buying
newspaper
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 compared to watching news online
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 power
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. To support
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, in the village of Kwetu in Zambia, increased purchase of local
newspaper
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 has been reported for the
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, papers are cost-effective as no extra charge is needed apart from the buying price.
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 works in favour of people who are of
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 class and enables them to save the extra coin.
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, reading on the internet has enabled learners to study online because they can balance family, work and study. They do not have to attend physical classes in order to get access to the learning materials.
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 has led to effective and smooth learning of their studies
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 the comfort of their homes.
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, most students at Florida University
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 attending online classes
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 their busy
schedule
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.
Further
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, internet
books
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 have
option
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 to Google anything
that is
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 not understandable as compared to printed papers.
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, when asked difficult questions by students, tutors just need to type it and an instance answer is received.
This
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the many benefits
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printed
books
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 have, I think they should be abolished and just have e-
books
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used
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 globally.

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Expand on certain points to provide more in-depth support and clarification, which can strengthen your argument.
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Try to avoid minor grammatical issues and ensure varied sentence structures for a more polished and cohesive writing style.
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There is a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates the writer's opinion, which reinforces the essay's message.
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