The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.

The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
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The line graph demonstrates the percentage of the transport registrations of the most typical types of commercial transport in the United States from 1970 to 2010. One notable observation is that
truck
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the truck
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remained high throughout the whole
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. At the beginning of
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time
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, the share of registered trucks accounted for almost 50% and recorded almost
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percentage by 2010. In 1980, its proportion dipped dramatically to 30%, and
taxi
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surpassed it with a peak of 35%.
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year was the only exception
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truck was not the most consumed one over the course of the
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. It is
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notable that
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taxis
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, which recorded a new high in 1980, started to decline sharply to 2000, falling to 15%.
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, it restarted to
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with a figure of 45%. Meanwhile,
bus
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was the least consumed vehicle over the
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and even decreased to almost 0% by 2010.
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, the data clearly shows that
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turck
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truck
was the most registered vehicle and followed by
taxi
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taxis
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and
bus
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buses
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despite various changes in the share of vehicle registration in the US between 1970 and 2010.
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