The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams depict the statistics about the distribution of locations that are used for dancing
classes
in one of the towns in Australia and the number of students that participate in various types of classes
, categorized based on their age group.
Overall
, most dance
classes
use private studios. Furthermore
, Ballet is dominated by kids under 11 and it is the most participated dance
class among the other three types. But, as they get older, kids prefer to attend modern dance
classes
.
The most used location for classes
is the private studios which percentage is 48%. It is followed by the other three locations which are far left behind, including 24% at school halls, 18% at community halls and other areas, and 10% at college-base studios.
Ballet has the highest number of participants with approximately 600 youngsters under 11 years old, and 300 teenagers in the age range 11 to 16. Meanwhile, Tap dance
class participants are above 400 for every age group. Lastly
, Modern dance
classes
have the greatest number of attendances at 500, with the major participants being teenagers and 300 children.Submitted by kelly on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, dance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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