The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the chars show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the chars show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Both
the table and the charts provide data on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in Britain. The table illustrates
sources
of finances
while
the chart shows how it was divided.
Overall
,
national
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the national
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government provided
huge
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a huge
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amount
of money as compared to other
sources
. The local taxes collected
low
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were low
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but in the following
year
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year,
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it added the
amount
. other
sources
of revenue contributed the least
amount
. In
both
the
years
,
high
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a high
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percentage was used on officers and staff salaries.
Further
,
same
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amount
of money was used for building and transport in
both
years
. To start with, the national government contributed the most for the two
years
.
That is
, 175.5m and 177.8m respectively. The local taxes were low in 2017 but increased from 91.2m to 102.3m in the following year but the other
sources
of income
such
as grants had only a rise of 0.5m increase as compared
from
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the previous year.
Nonetheless
, in
both
years
,
that is
2017 and 2018,
high
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a high
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percentage was utilized on salaries for officers and the
staffs
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staff
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that
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which
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is
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are
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75% and 69% of the total
amount
respectively. The cost for construction and transport remained constant for all the
years
amounting to 17% and as the usage of technology was the least in 2017 with 8%, the figure rose in 2018 to 14%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words both, sources, amount, years, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • allocation
  • funding sources
  • national government
  • local taxes
  • expenditure
  • distribution
  • categories
  • spending
  • salaries
  • technology
  • infrastructure
  • buildings
  • transport
  • financial year
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • economic factors
  • policy changes
  • comparisons
  • significant/noticeable changes
  • priorities
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