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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 line chart provides
a key information
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 about the
number
 of visitors
of
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 a Caribbean Island in the period between 2010 and 2017. The units are measured in Millions.
overall
, it is clear from the graph that
total
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number
 of
the
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visitors had a gradual growth over the years
untill
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until
 it
hitted
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hit
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the
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 peak in 2017.
In addition
, the amount of
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tourists staying on cruise ships had the lowest
number
 in 2010,
Whereas
 it rocked up to the highest
number
 in 2017.
According to
 what is shown, the trend for
tiurists
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tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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 was steady between 2010 and 2011 at 700
thousands
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.
Then
, it had an increase to 1 million and
half
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 in 2013.
Subsequentely
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Subsequently
, it
was remained
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remained
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 stable. After that, in 2015 dropped to one million and
quarter
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a quarter
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 in 2016.
Finally
, it increased to one million and half a gain
in
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 the end of the period.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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