The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

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The line graph illustrates the amount of consumed carbon dioxide per person in four countries the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal over 40 years from 1967 to 2007.

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, British people produced the highest amount of CO2. there was a significant increase in the carbon dioxide emissions in Portugal. In 1967, the amount of CO2 emissions started at about 11 metric

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and decreased slightly to just under 10 metric

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in 2007 in the UK.

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carbon dioxide from Sweden people was just above 8 metric

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increased sharply to just above 10 metric

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in 1997 before it dropped dramatically to the lowest level

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under 5 metric

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year. Both Italy and Portugal slight increase over the given period. Italy started at above 4 metric

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under 2 metric

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in 1967.

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they increased gradually ( to just under 8 , and just under 6 metric

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respectively) in

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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can learn.

The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. What extent do you agree or disagree?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people argue that it is the government’s responsibility to transport children to school, while others believe that parents should do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.