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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar charts depict the imported beverages, which are
tea
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 and
coffee
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 from
Canada
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, the United States, the United Kingdom and Germany. Units are measured in
tonnes
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 or 1,000 kilograms
Overall
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, imported
coffee
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the bar graphs show a downward trend in the consumption of
tea
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.
However
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, the imported
coffee
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 and
tea
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 graphs have some fluctuations. The rate of imported
coffee
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 in
Canada
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 and the United States had a minor difference.
Canada
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 bought around 39,000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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 and the US imported
coffee
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 at 40,000
tonnes
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,
while
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 Germany is the country that consumed imported
coffee
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 around 500,000 kilos which is the highest volume among all four nations and the UK has the lowest rate at 30,000,000 kilograms of imported
coffee
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. For
tea
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, the countries that have the highest consumption rate of
tea
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 is the United Kingdom was imported 80,000,000 kilos of
tea
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, which is higher than the three other countries. Germany is the
second ranked
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 country that bought
tea
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 but is lower than the UK by half. Followed by the United States has about 21,000
tonnes
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 of imported
coffee
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 and the
countries
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country
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 that bought
tea
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in
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with
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 the lowest percentage of all four nations is
Canada
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 around just 20,000
tonnes
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 consecutively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imports
  • tonnes
  • volume
  • trend
  • contrast
  • pattern
  • average
  • country-specific data
  • significant difference
  • beverage
  • ranking
  • highlight
  • fluctuate
  • proportion
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