The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
The presented graph illustrates the figures
of
Change preposition
for
shops
that closed and new shops
that were established from
the period from 2011 to 2018 in one country. Change preposition
in
Overall
, the number of opened shops
plunged in 2018.
To begin
with, In 2011, the number of opened shops
stood at 8500. After 1 year, it dramatically decreased to 4000. From 2012 to 2014, the figures demonstrates
a gradual increase to 6000 Change the verb form
demonstrate
shops
. It dipped again to 4000 in 2015. The store's numbers remained stable for 2 years. Then
, it minimaly
decreased to 3000.
Correct your spelling
minimally
On the other hand
, the number of closed stores
fluctuated for 4 years at 6500 stores
. It plummeted to less than 1000 stores
in 2015. after 1 year, it skyrocketed to 5000 stores
and stabilized for 3 years.
In conclusion, the government should support the market with more funds. They should create for them a good environment for a better investment.Submitted by mohannadsme on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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