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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
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The presented graph illustrates the figures
of
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shops
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 that closed and new
shops
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 that were established
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 the period from 2011 to 2018 in one country.
Overall
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, the number of opened
shops
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 plunged in 2018.
To begin
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 with, In 2011, the number of opened
shops
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 stood at 8500. After 1 year, it dramatically decreased to 4000. From 2012 to 2014, the figures
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 a gradual increase to 6000
shops
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. It dipped again to 4000 in 2015. The store's numbers remained stable for 2 years.
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, it
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minimally
 decreased to 3000.
On the other hand
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, the number of closed
stores
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 fluctuated for 4 years at 6500
stores
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. It plummeted to less than 1000
stores
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 in 2015. after 1 year, it skyrocketed to 5000
stores
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 and stabilized for 3 years. In conclusion, the government should support the market with more funds. They should create for them a good environment for a better investment.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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