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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below shows the percentage of
students
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 that attended 4 types of secondary
schools
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 in 2002, 2005, and 2009.
Overall
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, Voluntary-controlled
schools
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 were the most popular in the first two
years
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; but in 2009, they were replaced by community
schools
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. Specialist
schools
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 and Grammar
schools
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 were the least attendant
schools
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 in all the three
years
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. In 2000, 52% of
students
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 attended voluntary-controlled
schools
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;
however
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, their popularity decreased significantly over the next two
years
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, with only 38% of
students
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 attending in 2005 and just 20% in 2009.
In contrast
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, Community
schools
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, which were among the least popular
schools
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 in 2000, with only 12% of children in attendance, saw their popularity increase exponentially over the following
years
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, to 32% in 2005, and 58% in 2009. With regards to specialist
schools
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, attendance remained fairly constant for all the 3
years
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, between 10-12%.
On the other hand
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, Grammar
schools
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 accounted for 24% of
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students
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students'
student's
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 attendance in 2000, which decreased to 19% in 2005, and to 12% in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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