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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided map compares
present
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the present
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 development with the 1995
raymouth
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Plymouth
ray mouth
Greymouth
village
.
Overall
, the
village
 of
raymouth
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Plymouth
 had undergone significant development. The main road which connects most of the
village
 parts remained
same
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the same
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 except for some changes. Starting with the farmland and forest Park,
farmland
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the farmland
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converted
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was converted
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 into a golf playing area and tennis court occupied forest area.
Car
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The car
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 park was constructed
nearby
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near
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 the hotel and across the road
cafe was
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apply
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remained
its
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in its
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 position. More house was constructed on the
weste
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west
western
 side of the
village
.
Shop
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The shop
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 was converted into a restaurant and on the exact side of
restaurant
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the restaurant
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, across the road fish market was replaced by the apartments. A new fishing port was developed into a shoreline.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • main road
  • housing development
  • farmland
  • forest
  • golf course
  • tennis courts
  • fishing port
  • apartments
  • commercial services
  • supermarket
  • local shop
  • consumer needs
  • cafe
  • hotel
  • tourism
  • recreational facilities
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • priorities
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