The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar diagram displays the
employemnt
distribution by gender and type of career in Australia in the previous year. Correct your spelling
employment
Overall
it is immediately evident that more males than females
occupy the highest place in the various job type
with the exception of Professionals and Clericals.
900% of males are Tradespeople representing the highest place for men in the different careers Fix the agreement mistake
types
whereas
a little less than half of this
figure are labourers at 400%. Clerical is the next popular
job performed by men at 850%. Whilst 600% of males are Managers, approximately 650% are Professionals. Correct quantifier usage
most popular
Similarly
, whereas
550% of men are into
Production, just above 500% of them are Semi-professionals.
Turning to Change preposition
in
females
, Clericals
was the most popular profession among the job categories with women occupying the highest place Fix the agreement mistake
clerical
nearing
1000%. Replace the word
nearly
By contrast
, Tradespeople and Production which had the same number of females
at 100% was
the least popular among Change the verb form
were
this
gender. 250% of females
worked as labourers whilst 50% less and 100% more were Managers and Semi-professionals respectively.Submitted by nmaureen03 on
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