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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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The bar diagram displays the duration of
call
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calls
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 in billions of
minutes
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 made using various call types in the United Kingdom from 1995 to 2002.
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 it is immediately apparent that Local fixed line is the most used mode. Looking at the means of making calls, local fixed
lines
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 were the most popular, starting from about 72% in 1995 with increasing patronage over the next 4 years reaching a peak of 90
billions
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billion
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in
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minutes
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 in 1999.
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, the duration of calls by
this
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 mode declined in the subsequent years reaching 72% in 2002.
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, the National and International fixed
lines
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 had more users with advancing years. In 1996, the calls made by
the
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National and International fixed
lines
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 and mobile
lines
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 stood at nearly 40 billion in
minutes
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 and approximately 3 billion in
minutes
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. These call types lasted longer reaching just over 60
billions
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billion
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 in
minutes
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 and close to 45 billion in
minutes
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 in 2002 by the National and international fixed
lines
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 and mobile
lines
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 respectively.
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