Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Othour er believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
Sports
events
are an important part of our cultural life. Where should we hold international competitions? Some people desire their country to host ones
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one
while
others believe that sporting events
bring more problem
than benefits. I support the first opinion, we will discuss Fix the agreement mistake
problems
this
social issue further
in the essay.
Firstly
, we will consider the first point of view. The grand event is a good reason to attract foreign tourists, they will be
spend their money on souvenirs, accommodation, food, and tickets. Unnecessary verb
apply
Thus
it will bring scads of money for
the national economy. Change preposition
to
For example
, the Olympic Games in Sochi in 2014 has paid off totally. Moreover
, sporting events
exert an
cultural influence on the world and improve Change the article
a
an
image of the country. Correct article usage
the
Besides
, some expenditure for buidings
, Correct your spelling
buildings
such
as stadions
and logistics infrastructure, can be useful in the future. Correct your spelling
stations
stadiums
Also
, funs
will be able to go to the performance of their Correct your spelling
fans
favorite
athletes without travelling.
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Secondly
, we will consider the second point of view. The main problem is cost
of Add an article
the cost
constructions
. Fix the agreement mistake
construction
For example
, The Mundial or the World Football Cup in Russia in 2018 has
brought proceeds Unnecessary verb
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nearly
6 billion Change preposition
of nearly
of
dollars, but costs were nearly 11 Change preposition
apply
billions
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billion
of
dollars, most similar Change preposition
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events
aren't profitable likewise
hence
we aren't worth holding these events
. Additionally
, a host of event
is a serious responsibility. Fix the agreement mistake
events
For example
, a horrendous terrorist attack in
the Olympic Games in Munich in 1972 when the Change preposition
at
german
policy couldn't free hostages from terrorists.
In conclusion, I believe that a big international festival is worth the money, but we should reduce its cost.Capitalize word
German
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supported main points
You address both views on the topic and give relevant examples to support your arguments, such as the Olympic Games in Sochi and the World Cup in Russia.