All criminals should have access to education and rehabilitation programs while in prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree on this IELTS topic?

Criminals

are undoubtedly judged negatively by

all

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the community,

whereas

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and

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this

resentment can lead them into inhumane

behavior

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behaviour

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or lack of attention towards the criminal. In modern days, there are

bunch

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of

education

and

rehabilitation

programs

that are designed for all

criminals

while

in prison.

Hence

, in

this

essay, I

would

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discuss why we should agree that

criminals

should access these

programs

in their detention time.

Firstly

,

education

is the most fundamental pillar that everyone must have

for

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their

life

. I believe that all

criminals

have not received a proper

education

in their whole

life

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lives

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; based on my experience, all deviant acts are happening because of there is a lack of

education

.

Therefore

, good

education

and

rehabilitation

programs

are expected to provide a more positive lifestyle or maybe a new source of income for the

criminals

.

Secondly

, there is always a second chance for everyone, including

criminals

. We must agree

on

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everyone has made mistakes,

so

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and so

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do

criminals

, they are just like us,

an

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ordinary

human

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humans

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. Many

criminals

repent

what

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of what

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they did and

wanted

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to start their new

life

. Decent

education

can prevent them

repeating

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from repeating

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the same mistake in

their

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next chapter of

life

.

Besides

that,

rehabilitation

programs

help to stop them from their negative addiction so they can change into someone who is healthier. In conclusion,

however

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there are some detestations for the

criminals

, I

am agreeing

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that a proper

education

and

rehabilitation

program must be easily accessed by the

criminals

because it can help them improve their skills and help them become a much

more

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better person.