Social media has replaced the traditional methods of communicating and people use more and more of social media to communicate and to follow news and events. Some people think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion with examples.
Social
media
has replaced the traditional methods of
communicating and people
use more and more of social media
to
communicate and to
follow Fix the infinitive
apply
news
and events. Some people
think
the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Discuss the
advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion with
Examples.
From
the Change preposition
In
last
decade
social Add a comma
decade,
medial
users Replace the word
media
has been
increased significantly.
The first reason is you can connect with anyone in the world. Wrong verb form
have
Therefore
you can communicate with them immediately and share your thoughts and ideas without traveling or spending money. Secondly
, real time
world & local Add a hyphen
real-time
news
alert
. Unlike, Fix the agreement mistake
alerts
old
days if any important Correct article usage
the old
news
will not know
immediately. Wrong verb form
be known
Due to
social media
these days
all the Add a comma
days,
news
and updates are in our finger tips
. Correct your spelling
fingertips
Lastly
, Better reach for business and personal development. In order to boost your business you can post free advertisement
Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
in
your social Change preposition
on
media
where
anyone can see from the rural area to urban Correct word choice
that
area
and Fix the agreement mistake
areas
if
your famous person can increase your fan base.
Correct word choice
apply
On the other hand
, there are few
drawbacks Correct article usage
a few
using
social Change preposition
to using
media
. Firstly
, lack of privacy, in the
social Correct article usage
apply
media
anyone can access personal information this
can lead to theft and cyberbullying. Correct pronoun usage
which
Secondly
face to face interaction Add a comma
Secondly,
not be
there. Change the verb form
is not
was not
Therefore
, will not know the actual reaction of the person or the feelings and it won’t be a good sign for long time
relationship. Replace the word
a long-term
Lastly
, Misinformation due to
fake news
circulation many harmful act
can happen in the country, which will lead to unstable Change to a plural noun
acts
situation
Fix the agreement mistake
situations
between
Change preposition
among
people
.
In my opinion advantages outweigh the disadvantages, however
all Add a comma
however,
the
social Correct article usage
apply
media
user
should know Fix the agreement mistake
users
there
limits and how to use Replace the word
their
in
Correct pronoun usage
them in
a
right way without Correct article usage
the
affect to
any individual or country. And Wrong verb form
affecting
people
must know how to protect them
from the scam Correct pronoun usage
themselves
due to
scam many Change preposition
apply
people
had
issues with their personal life.Wrong verb form
have
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You have successfully addressed both advantages and disadvantages of social media, covering various aspects.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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