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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries. The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentages of various
transport
 ways in
Canada
, Belgium, Germany and
Netherlands
Correct article usage
the Netherlands
show examples
 and the bar graph shows a survey outcome of
car
use
 in
Canada
.
Overall
, the
use
 of cars is the highest in all four countries. In Belgium and in
Canada
 the usage of
bicycles
 and in
Canada
 and Germany the usage of other methods of
transport
 are
least
Correct article usage
the least
show examples
 popular respectively. Most
people
use
 the
car
 in
Canada
 because they have no alternative way and the least amount of
people
use
 it since they work night shifts. 90% of Canadians
use
 the
car
 as the
transport
 method and 1%
use
bicycles
 and other methods. 26% of Dutch
people
use
bicycles
 to travel and it is the most popular method in the nation. Public
transport
 is preferred by most Germans, which is 18% and it is equal to
people
 travelling by foot in the Netherlands. 3% of
people
 in Belgium
use
 other methods of
transport
 and it surpasses the
use
 of
bicycles
 in the country which is 2%. In
Canada
, most individuals, nearly 40,
use
 the
car
 because they have no alternative method to travel. 30
people
 stated that they
use
 the
car
 since they need it for work and it is
also
 the second highest reason for
car
 usage. The least amount of
people
, just below 10,
use
 the
car
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
 work night shifts.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, canada, car, use, bicycles, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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