The pie charts below show unitsof electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The pie charts provide
units
of electricity production by fuel source in Australia
and France
in 1980 and 2000.
It is clear that
people
from Australia
use more coal than people
from France
in these two years.
For example
, in Australia
coal was used by exactly a
half in 1980 and the vast majority in 2000. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, units
of electricity production by coal in France
is
equal to 25 Wrong verb form
were
units
out of ninety
Correct your spelling
90
units
in 1980. By contrast
, this
type of fuel source was used by a small minority in 2000.
Meanwhile, approximately quarter
of Correct article usage
a quarter
people
in Australia
used hydro power
for electricity production in these two years. Correct your spelling
hydropower
However
, in France
hydro power
was used by Correct your spelling
hydropower
very
tiny fraction in 1980 and 2000. Quantities of using nuclear power for the same reason were one out of six in 1980 and Add an article
a very
the very
significant
majority in 2000. Add an article
a significant
But
, Correct word choice
However
this
type of fuel source was not used by people
from Australia
. Remaining
two sources were used by a small Correct article usage
The remaining
partion
of Correct your spelling
portion
partition
people
from these countries in 1980 and 2000.Submitted by dnm.best on
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