The charts below show the share of the Swiss Watch market by brand in 2020 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant.

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The

pie chart illustrates the proportion of the shares in

Swiss-watches

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Swiss watches

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by six

companies

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2020 to 2021.

Overall

Rolex

was the dominant

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suppliers

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in both years.

Rolex

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its dominance,

while

the other

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this

stock in 2021. the three

bigest

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companies

producer

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in 2020 were

Rolex

, Omega, and Cartier with 39.5%, 15.6%, and 14.5%, respectively.

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while

Rolex

increases its shares the other two

companies

decline in 2021. Despite the minor decreases from 14.5% to 13.08% in 2021, Cartier replaced Omega as the second-highest company

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in 2021. The other three competitors

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had around 10% in 2020 each, but all

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in 2021 to around 5%. Petek

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the largest dropping from 10.5% in 2020 to 8.88% in 2021. From the three smallest

companies

, Audemars

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Piguet

went from the

smalles

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smallest

smaller

company in 2020 to the fourth largest company in 2021, achieving around 9%.

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The charts below show the share of the Swiss Watch market by brand in 2020 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant.

In many countries, there is a growing concern about the quality of education. What are the reasons behind this issue, and what measures can be taken to improve the education system?

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Parents want to achieve balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. What do think is the reason? Discuss possible solutions and provide examples

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this stetement?