The charts below show the share of the Swiss Watch market by brand in 2020 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant.

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The

pie chart illustrates the proportion of the shares in

Swiss-watches

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Swiss watches

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by six

companies

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2020 to 2021.

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Rolex

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was the dominant

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suppliers

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in both years.

Rolex

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its dominance,

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the other

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stock in 2021. the three

bigest

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companies

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producer

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in 2020 were

Rolex

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, Omega, and Cartier with 39.5%, 15.6%, and 14.5%, respectively.

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Rolex

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increases its shares the other two

companies

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decline in 2021. Despite the minor decreases from 14.5% to 13.08% in 2021, Cartier replaced Omega as the second-highest company

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in 2021. The other three competitors

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had around 10% in 2020 each, but all

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in 2021 to around 5%. Petek

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the largest dropping from 10.5% in 2020 to 8.88% in 2021. From the three smallest

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, Audemars

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Piguet

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smallest

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company in 2020 to the fourth largest company in 2021, achieving around 9%.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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145 words

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The charts below show the share of the Swiss Watch market by brand in 2020 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant.

some people say that animals shoud be used for entertainment.do you agree ao dis agree?

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Students entering university should be continue to live at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?