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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts here illustrate the statistics regarding marriage among the
people
 of
Canada
 and Australia in different categories.
People
 in
Canada
is
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are
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 divided into six different sections. Here, more than half of the
population
 are separated but not
divorecd
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divorced
,
while
 29% stay married. The
percentages
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percentage
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 of divorcees
is
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are
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 only 1%,
while
 the portion of the
population
 who are both never
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married
maried
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married
 and widowed
are
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is
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 7% and only 3% of
marriege
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marriage
is
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are
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 between the same sex
On the other hand
,
Australian
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the Australian
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population
 is divided into five cohorts, where
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 (46%) of the
people
 remain married after their wedding. In second place, 41%
people
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of people
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 are separated but not divorced, which is starkly different from the scenario in
Canada
.
While
 the other
category
 shows similar statistics as
Canada
, as their divorced
people
 are at 2% and never married
as well as
 widowed
people
 respectively take up
the
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apply
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5% and 6% of the
population
. To summarise,
separated
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the separated
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 but not divorced and married
category
 dominate across both countries, where
first
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the first
a first
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category
 is in the top in
Canada
,
however
,
second
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the second
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category
 covers more
people
 in Australia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, population, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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