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The bar chart below shows the proportion of renewable energy of total supply from 1997 to 2010.

The bar chart below shows the proportion of renewable energy of total supply from 1997 to 2010.
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The bar chart compares the four different countries in terms of
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of renewable
energy
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 in the total
energy
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 supply between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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most
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highest
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proportion
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 of renewable
energy
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 was experienced in
Iceland
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 and the
least
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lowest
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proportion
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 of renewable
energy
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 was in
Australia
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.In 1997, the largest
proportion
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 of renewable
energy
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 was experienced in
Iceland
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, at over 60%. The figure for Norway was quite lower than that, at over 50%. The indicators of
Australia
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 and
Germany
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 were relatively similar, at 8% for
Australia
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 and over 10% for
Germany
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. In 2007, the largest
proportion
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 of renewable
energy
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 was in
Iceland
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, which represented approximately 65% of total
energy
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 supply. The indicator of Norway was considerably lower than that, at nearly 60%. The figure for
Germany
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 was the same as those for
Australia
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, at 10%. In 2010, the biggest amount of renewable
energy
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 belonged to
the
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Iceland
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, at nearly 80%.
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Norway had the second largest indicator, with approximately 55%. The lowest indicator was experienced in
Australia
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, at 5%. The figure for
Germany
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 was higher than that, at 12%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, energy, iceland, australia, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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