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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map compares changes that
has
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 taken place at the Seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. A compass for direction is provided.
Overall
, in 1990 there were many trees and scattered buildings
in
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on
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 the
north west
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northwest
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 side. Some trees were cut down and
few
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a few
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 homes
demolished
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were demolished
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 in 2005 to provide a space where a large supermarket was constructed
as well as
building
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a building
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 of four huge buildings in
north east
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northeast
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 area. In
the
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1990 there was neither airstrip near the school
or
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 a factory. These were built in 2005
at
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in
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 the
north west
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northwest
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 areas because many trees needed to be cut down first to offer space for the construction.
Additionally
, a ferry was commenced in
the
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2005 that connected from the newly built supermarket to the railway station.
However
, despite
of
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the many changes that took place in
year
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the year
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 2005, the school and the hospital remained untouched in the same areas they were in
the
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1990.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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