In some cities, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings, so people can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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landscape
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has
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few controls over the design and
contruction
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construction
of new houses and office
buildings
,
it
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cause
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citizens can build in
whtaever
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whatever
style they like. I believe that urban areas that develop without
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plan will cause some problems.
It
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will be some drawbacks
due to
tidiness, rather than the benefits. First of all, urban planning is the key to developing a
city
that can accommodate its residents to live comfy and
healthy
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.
Furthermore
, urban planning is guidance for the government and the citizens to build every space,
such
as houses, office
buildings
, parks, irrigations, shopping
centre
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, and other utilizations.
Moreover
, unplanned urban development can
causes
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several problems.
For instance
, office
buildings
that built without controls will
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like not
matching than
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others.
As a result
, it will be decreased the tidiness of the
city
. So,
government
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need to
put
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attention
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its issues.
On the other hand
, the developers have a wide range
creativities
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that will
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beneficially
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for aesthetic panoramic. The building where built with different
artitechture
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architecture
will increase the variety of the
city
landscape. To give a clear example, combinations of
buildings
which
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built in modern pattern and traditional
pattern
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will look like art galleries that can
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by everyone.
In addition
, the variation of building patterns will attract tourists to visit the
city
. It will be
benefial
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beneficial
for the
city
's economy. In conclusion, the government must control urban planning to
achieves
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some benefits in aesthetic panoramic, and
also
to prevent potential disadvantages related to tidiness.
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Grammar
Ensure all sentences are grammatically correct. For example, 'it cause citizens' should be 'it causes citizens' and 'unplanned urban development can causes' should be 'unplanned urban development can cause'.
Content
Provide more specific examples and expand on how the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. This will help strengthen your argument.
Structure
Work on the logical flow between ideas. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main point and that your transitions between points are smooth.
Structure
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential elements of a well-structured essay.
Content
Your reasoning about the importance of urban planning and the potential aesthetics benefits is insightful.

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