In some cities, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings, so people can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Recently, several
city's
Change noun form
cities'
landscape
Change to a plural noun
landscapes
has
few controls over the design and Wrong verb form
have had
contruction
of new houses and office Correct your spelling
construction
buildings
, it
Correct pronoun usage
which
cause
citizens can build in Replace the word
causes
whtaever
style they like. I believe that urban areas that develop without Correct your spelling
whatever
good
plan will cause some problems. Add an article
a good
It
will be some drawbacks Correct pronoun usage
There
due to
tidiness, rather than the benefits.
First of all, urban planning is the key to developing a city
that can accommodate its residents to live comfy and healthy
. Change the word
healthily
Furthermore
, urban planning is guidance for the government and the citizens to build every space, such
as houses, office buildings
, parks, irrigations, shopping centre
, and other utilizations. Fix the agreement mistake
centres
Moreover
, unplanned urban development can causes
several problems. Wrong verb form
cause
For instance
, office buildings
that built without controls will be look
like not Change the verb form
look
matching than
others. Wrong verb form
match
As a result
, it will be decreased the tidiness of the city
. So, government
need to Add an article
the government
put
attention Verb problem
pay
on
its issues.
Change preposition
to
On the other hand
, the developers have a wide range creativities
that will Change preposition
of creativities
Add a missing verb
be beneficially
beneficially
for aesthetic panoramic. The building where built with different Change the word
beneficial
artitechture
will increase the variety of the Correct your spelling
architecture
city
landscape. To give a clear example, combinations of buildings
which
built in modern pattern and traditional Correct pronoun usage
apply
pattern
will look like art galleries that can Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
see
by everyone. Wrong verb form
be seen
In addition
, the variation of building patterns will attract tourists to visit the city
. It will be benefial
for the Correct your spelling
beneficial
city
's economy.
In conclusion, the government must control urban planning to achieves
some benefits in aesthetic panoramic, and Wrong verb form
achieve
also
to prevent potential disadvantages related to tidiness.Submitted by muh.atho on
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Grammar
Ensure all sentences are grammatically correct. For example, 'it cause citizens' should be 'it causes citizens' and 'unplanned urban development can causes' should be 'unplanned urban development can cause'.
Content
Provide more specific examples and expand on how the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. This will help strengthen your argument.
Structure
Work on the logical flow between ideas. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main point and that your transitions between points are smooth.
Structure
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential elements of a well-structured essay.
Content
Your reasoning about the importance of urban planning and the potential aesthetics benefits is insightful.
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