Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days, choosing
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to
work
as a doctor and engineer is now one of the most controversial issues that people like to debate. I believe that individuals who
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and
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have the right to choose
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the country
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where they want to
work
. On the one hand, some individuals
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that they should
work
in
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the country
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where they get a diploma
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in
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and
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courses. They believe that
contries
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countries
expect that by offering various education systems and academic curriculums, they can develop not only personal educational
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but
also
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economic status.
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is because students are forced
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they
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devote a significant amount of time to
work
in
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the country
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where they learn.
For example
, some countries like
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amended their law, which is
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who
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in
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should
work
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least three years as a doctor and
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engineers
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after they
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graduated
graduate
.
On the other hand
, in my opinion, they should be given choice options freely.
Although
they were given
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advanced academic environments and classes, they have the authority to choose the
country
where they
work
, as the salaries are one of the most important
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factors
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, but it
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from
country
to
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.
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medical and technology studies require a lot of money and time.
For instance
, numerous students decided to
study
abroad
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in
india
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rather than
study
in their home
country
due to
lower fees and shorter courses. Deciding to
study
in
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them to save money and time.
However
, after completing their studies, they truly want to
work
in the USA or UK
instead
of working in
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because of salaries. In conclusion, some people think that working in
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where they
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is
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choice with regard to financial benefit to
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as compensation.
However
, I
beleive
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believe
that choosing
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where they
work
is obviously their right, as it
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to
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money.
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Try to enhance the clarity of your arguments. While the points made are understandable, occasionally the meaning is somewhat obscured due to awkward phrasing or slight grammatical issues.
examples
Work on providing depth to your examples. The examples provided, such as those related to India, are relevant but somewhat broad. Adding more specific details could strengthen your points.
grammar
Make sure to thoroughly proofread to catch small errors in grammar and word choice. While these do not significantly detract from your argument, fixing them could improve overall coherence and readability.
addresses topic
Your essay addresses both views on the topic and concludes with a clear personal opinion, which enhances the effectiveness of the task response.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented and provide a clear framework for the discussion.
relevance
You have included relevant points and examples, particularly regarding the situation in India, which demonstrates awareness of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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