It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Natural
talent
is truly a gift from God. Some children are very good at sports and music because they are born with those talents.
However
, some believe that with proper guidance and
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work one can
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natural
talent
.
Although
, each side has its own merits, and I support the
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view. On one hand, It is believed that people born with
talent
are the epitome of success and leadership. These individuals have a natural gift which gives them an advantage in their
field
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fields
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of
talent
like athletics, music and
other
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others
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. These inborn abilities require little effort to develop but
due to
their natural
talent
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it
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will grow tens of folds.
For example
, Messi is a child prodigy, he was born with a
talent
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football but to become the greatest of all time he had to
practice
regularly and
continues
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to hone his skills.
On the other hand
, people think that the level of a
god gifted
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talent
can be achieved through
right
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education, guidance, and hard work. Even if there is a natural
talent
exists, it
also
needs regular
practice
and polishing to make it exceptional and achieve greatness.
For example
, there are many great footballers like Ronaldo who are
self made
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greatest footballers through their
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will, hard work and dedication.
To conclude
,
although
innate
talent
can be beneficial and require a little effort to achieve success
but
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to maintain that level of success constant
practice
is required. The extraordinary prodigy in any field is a product of both natural
talent
and constant
practice
.
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Expand the discussion of the second viewpoint to make it as comprehensive as the first one.
cohesion
Consider adding more transitional phrases to further enhance the flow between paragraphs.
structure
Clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the essay.
content
Relevant examples used to support each viewpoint, especially the use of well-known figures like Messi and Ronaldo to illustrate points.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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