It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is truly a gift from God. Some children are very good at sports and music because they are born with those talents.
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, some believe that with proper guidance and
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work one can
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natural
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, each side has its own merits, and I support the
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view. On one hand, It is believed that people born with
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are the epitome of success and leadership. These individuals have a natural gift which gives them an advantage in their
field
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fields
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of
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like athletics, music and
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. These inborn abilities require little effort to develop but
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their natural
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talent
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it
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will grow tens of folds.
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, Messi is a child prodigy, he was born with a
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football but to become the greatest of all time he had to
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regularly and
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to hone his skills.
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, people think that the level of a
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talent
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can be achieved through
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education, guidance, and hard work. Even if there is a natural
talent
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exists, it
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needs regular
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and polishing to make it exceptional and achieve greatness.
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, there are many great footballers like Ronaldo who are
self made
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greatest footballers through their
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will, hard work and dedication.
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innate
talent
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can be beneficial and require a little effort to achieve success
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to maintain that level of success constant
practice
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is required. The extraordinary prodigy in any field is a product of both natural
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and constant
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grammar
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Expand the discussion of the second viewpoint to make it as comprehensive as the first one.
cohesion
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structure
Clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the essay.
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Relevant examples used to support each viewpoint, especially the use of well-known figures like Messi and Ronaldo to illustrate points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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