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The chart below shows the percentage films produced by 5 different countries in 3 year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage films produced by 5 different countries in 3 year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates how many films were manufactured by five various nations over the 3-year timescale spanning from 2007 to 2009. It is noticeable that both countries A and C exhibited downward trends in the number of films
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, the proportion of movies produced in
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country
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 B, D and E witnessed completely opposite patterns during the surveyed period. Notably,
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 A
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 by far the highest number of flicks throughout the period. From the outset in 2007, the percentage of movies made in nation A was highest, accounting for nearly 90%, which was nearly 40% higher than that of nation B.
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, over the next year, there was a drop to 80% in the total movie manufacturing in
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 A in 2009,
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 a rise to 20% was experienced in
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 B during the surveyed period. From 2007 onwards, 20% of film output came from region C, compared to 13% and 5% of countries D and E respectively.
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, the figures for D and E grew slowly in 2009, with the former taking up almost 15%,
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 latter around 8%.
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, there was a minimal rise to around 22% in the data of
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 C in 2008, before decreasing slightly to roughly 18% in 2009.

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