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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.

There are some arguments about dinosaurs being an
endotherm
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. It is believed that they are reptiles and were not
endotherms
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.
However
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, there are shreds of
evidence
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 that consider them to be
endotherms
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. The first
evidence
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 is that a dinosaur fossil had been found in the polar region, where only
endotherm
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animals
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 can survive.
Nevertheless
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, the lecture tells us that the polar region was warm enough for ectothermy
animals
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 and when the polar region became cold,
animals
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 that were not
endotherms
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 migrated to warmer climates. The second piece of
evidence
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 is
Endotherms
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 allow
animals
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 to do physical activity
such
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 as running, and it is possible for the species who have a leg structure positioned underneath their
body
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. Dinosaurs proved that their legs position are underneath their
body
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. It is different from other reptiles, which their legs are positioned beside their
body
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.
However
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, the lecture says that even though they had their leg position underneath their
body
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, doesn’t mean it is built for running. Other than that their leg position is to support their weight not for physical activity. The
last
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 piece of
evidence
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 is one of the traits of
endotherm
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 species is they have a haversian canal that rapid the growth of
animals
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, which was found in a dinosaur
body
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. Even so, the lecture stated that they have
growth
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a growth
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 ring that controls their
growths
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growth
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.
This
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 growth ring is
evidence
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 that they did not grow rapidly even though they had
Haversian
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a Haversian
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 canal. So
to conclude
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, it is not
endotherm
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.

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introduction conclusion
Your essay presents a clear understanding of the topic, but the introduction and conclusion could be more structured to frame your arguments better. Consider adding a brief introduction that sets the context and a conclusion that summarizes the key points.
task achievement
You have effectively compared the points from the lecture and the reading passage, addressing the main arguments about whether dinosaurs were endotherms. This is a key strength in achieving a complete response to the task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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