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The chart illustrates how many grams of fish, red meat, and chicken were consumed per person per week (lamb, beef, chicken) in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

The chart illustrates how many grams of fish, red meat, and chicken were consumed per person per week (lamb, beef, chicken) in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
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, LOOKING AT THE GRAPH, CHICKEN WAS BY FAR THE MOST CONSUMED MEAT, WITH THE OPPOSITE OF
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 BEING TRUE FOR FISH, AT THE SAME TIME,
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 OTHERS DID NOT OBSERVE SIGNIFICANT CHANGES DURING THE WHOLE PERIOD, THERE WAS A SUBSTANTIAL DECREASE IN THE CONSUMPTION
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 OF FISH. AS FAR AS LAMB IS CONCERNED, THE CONSUMPTION WAS HALF IN 1979 AND DECREASED SLIGHTLY TO APPROXIMATELY 120
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 IN 1989. THESE FIGURES SHOWED A DOWNWARD TREND, ENDING AT 70
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 IN 2004. THE FIGURES FOR FISH MAINTAINED THE SAME LEVEL, ENDING AT BELOW FIFTH IN 2004. WHEN IT COMES TO BEEF, THE CONSUMPTION WAS 220
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 IN 1979 AND DECLINED SHARPLY TO 170
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 IN 1984 AND INCREASED DRAMATICALLY TO 180 IN 1989, ENDING AT 120
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 IN 2004.
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, CHICKEN SHOWED A SHARP INCREASE THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD, STARTING AT 150
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 IN 1979 AND REACHING APPROXIMATELY 250
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 IN 2004.

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