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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.

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Given pictures describe
tomato
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ketchup creating
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ketchup-creating
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 steps. There are 15 pictures and each picture describes processes
step
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 by
step
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 in detail. Each
step
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 describes the manufacturing processes of
tomato
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ketchup
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 from picking
tomatoes
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step
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 to serving
tomato
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ketchup
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step
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.
Firstly
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,
tomatoes
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 are picked and stored in a basket. Prior to
tomatoes
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 being sent to the factory by truck, they are sorted into rotten and fresh. Following that
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tomatoes stalk
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tomato stalks
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 are cut off for peeling and the seeds
tomatoes
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 are separated. Until the
tomatoes
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 are crushed, they are stored in the container. Once some ingredients have been added to a container
such
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 as sugar, vinegar, salt,
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tomatoes
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and tomatoes
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 are boiling. In order to fill
bottles
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 with
ketchup
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, it takes 2 hours to cool down. Once
bottles
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 have been labelled, their quality is controlled by the manufacturer. Prior to
ketchup
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bottles
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 are carried to the market by truck, they are stocked in boxes. Once
tomato
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bottles
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 of
ketchup
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 have been stored in markets, can be bought for eating with hamburgers and fries.
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introduction conclusion present
Refine your introduction and conclusion to make them stronger and clearer. The introduction should briefly state what the process is about, while the conclusion can summarize the main steps or mention how the process culminates.
logical structure
Improve cohesive devices between sentences and steps. Use linking words such as 'Firstly,' 'subsequently,' 'following this,' 'once,' etc., to create a smoother flow between steps.
clear comprehensive ideas
Make sure each step is clear and distinct. Avoid repeating similar ideas; instead, vary the vocabulary and structure to maintain reader interest. Check for repetitiveness and eliminate redundant phrases.
complete response
The essay covers all the steps from picking tomatoes to serving tomato ketchup, showing a complete understanding of the process.
supported main points
Good effort in describing the sequence of actions in detail, making it clear what happens at each stage.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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