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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays more and more people
use
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 the
internet
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 to find
information
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 and news updates. Replacing the old school
newspapers
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 with
modern day
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 technology and unsinging the
internet
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.
This
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in
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 my opinion, is a great
use
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 of technology and can have great benefits to everyone, it is faster and it can give more accurate
information
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. The
internet
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 provides convenience and a faster way to access all different news regardless of the person's location and time. The search bar can provide a variety of ways to sort
information
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 to help the user find the correct
information
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 with the least amount of time and effort.
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, using the sort by feature to find
information
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 about the most recent or relevant,
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, a new health discovery or
most
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 recent sale drop of a certain item. The
internet
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 can
also
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 help to provide real-time
information
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 like online football
game
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.
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, another advantage is printing
newspapers
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 uses up a lot of
paper
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 and ink. Which has a negative impact on global climate. It is not the appropriate method to cut down trees to make
paper
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 that might eventually end up in the trash. A more sustainable solution is to reuse old
paper
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 and reduce the current
use
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 of
paper
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.
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, using
the
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apply
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tablets and phones to find
information
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 for years
instead
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 of buying new
newspapers
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. In conclusion, the
use
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 of traditional
newspapers
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 should be limited and a newer more beneficial way is to
use
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 the
internet
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 to harvest the requested
information
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 in a better eco-friendlier manner.

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grammar syntax
Work on refining grammatical accuracy and sentence structures to enhance clarity and readability.
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Develop points further with more relevant and specific examples to strengthen arguments.
linking
Ensure smooth flow of ideas between paragraphs by using more transitional phrases.
proofreading editing
Check for minor spelling and word choice errors to improve overall coherence.
structure
The essay has a clear structure with a well-defined introduction and conclusion which effectively summarizes the main points.
content relevance
The main points are relevant and address the prompt adequately, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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