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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give information about the proportions of British
students
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 in England at one university who have the ability to
talk
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speak
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 more than one
language
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in addition
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 to English, over a 10-year period from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
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, the most spoken
language
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 for British
students
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 is Spanish. The number of
students
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 who speak two other
languages
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 has increased, similar to the
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students
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number of students
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 who speak another
language
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, which has
also
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 been increasing.
Students
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 who do not speak other
languages
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 and
students
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 who speak German and French decreased over the period. In 2000, the
students
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 who spoke Spanish had the highest percentage at 30%. By 2010, the number increased by 5%.
Students
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 who spoke two other
languages
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 and
students
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 who spoke another
language
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 were 10% and 15% in 2000; by 2010, the rates increased by 5%. The
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students
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number of students
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 who spoke German were 10% in 2000 and remained at the same number in 2010. 20% of
students
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 did not speak other
languages
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 in 2000, and by 2010 the percentage decreased by 10%.
Students
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 who spoke French decreased by 5% in the 10 years and became 10% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic competence
  • significant
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • popularity
  • relatively
  • decade
  • compare/contrast
  • survey
  • data
  • fluent
  • proficient
  • bilingual
  • predominant
  • minority
  • emerge
  • dwindle
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