The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
The chart illustrates the stages
to create
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different kinds of leather products using animal skin.
Overall
, the process of producing leather items involves multiple steps including washing, flattering, polishing, soaking and so on. As shown in the chart, the process begins with the drying of the
animal
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animal's
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skin under the sun. Once fully dried,
to sanitize
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apply
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the
skins
in a mixture of water and lime,
they
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are loaded onto the trucks and transported to a factory. In the manufactory, once
skins
are soaked in the lime, they are flattering using a special machine for
further
processing. Afterwards, there is a second soaking stage, but
this
time, flattered
skins
are dampened in the mixture of water and vegetable matter to make them ready for the next stage.
Lastly
,
skins
undergo a polishing stage and are loaded into the trucks to be delivered to the factory where they are converted into beautiful leather products.
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