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Many believe that learning a language at an early age is better while others think such language should be taught later. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A lot of people
belive
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 that learning another
language
 at an early age is far better than learning one at
older
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an older
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ages
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. In
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 I am going to discuss
this
 matter. Many people believe that it is better for
children
 to learn a
language
 at
early
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ages
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 because
children
 are fast learners. They express
children
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that children
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 at the ages of 3 to 5 are ready to learn and speak a new
language
 and the older they get, the harder it becomes to learn a new
language
.
children
 learn everything in an indirect way before they go to school.
However
, some people believe that in order to learn a new
language
,
children
 must have an
unerstanding
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understanding
 of the basic sentence structure of their native
language
 and be able to read and write it before learning a new
language
. They state that
childrens
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 ability to learn languages
isnt
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isn't
 fully developed before the age of 6 and
thats
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that's
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 why learning a new
language
 has to wait.
overall
, there are different opinions on what age is the best to start learning a new
alnguage
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language
. I believe
children
 are capable of learning
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 new
language
 before they go to school. They can learn in an indirect way, just as they learn their mother
language
.
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The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the approach of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion on the matter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a distinct viewpoint, which helps to clearly present the contrasting opinions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mimic
  • cognitive abilities
  • nuances
  • surface-level understanding
  • sophisticated learning strategies
  • critical thinking skills
  • intrinsic motivation
  • analytical skills
  • flexibility
  • sponge-like
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