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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

#technology #people #viewpoints
Nowadays,
technology
 changes the way
people
 maintain relationships.
While
 some
people
 argue that
modern day
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technology
 made us more isolated than before, I believe modern
technology
bought
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people
 together in a positive way.
technology
 has brought us
a lots
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 of ways to communicate more efficiently, it is only the
user
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users
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 of these ways who misuse them. Some
people
 may argue that modern
technology
 could pose two negative effects.
Firstly
, it causes
people
 to have less time to interact with others in real
life
.
This
 shallow
communication
 may minimize the possibility of knowing someone on a deeper level
,
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 because online personality could potentially create a false perception of relationships.
Furthermore
, it is true that young
people
 today have a higher tendency to spend their time glued to their screens rather than meeting other
people
 in
the
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real
life
. Because of
this
, they not only reduce their ability to socialize but
also
 increase the proportion of radiation effect they get.
However
, I agree with those who believe that there are some pros of modern
technology
. The first benefit is that
people
 have fast access to communicate instantly. A number of applications,
such
 as Zoom, WhatsApp, and G-mail allow
people
 to do online meetings, video calls, and send electronic messages. Another benefit is that
people
 can share
communication
 quickly. They will not need to worry about where and when they communicate because
communication
 is no longer limited by geographical location. In conclusion,
while
 modern
technology
 leads to negative sides in social
life
, the existence of modern
technology
 could ease
people
's
communication
 with others.
Therefore
, I remain convinced that modern
technology
 gives a number of benefits to human
life
 and
its
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 depends on the personal use of it .
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