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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied pie charts indicate how many various ways there are for getting the
news
 in two different countries
such
 as
Canada
 and
Australia
. It can be clearly seen that the best way
for accessing
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 the
news
 is Online facilities or digital networking.
However
,people do not prefer to get
news
 from listening to the Radio in both
Canada
 and
Australia
. Regarding
to
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Australia
,just over a half percentage of getting
news
 is
for
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from
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 Online websites at %52(which is the highest percentage of various ways over the period),Compared to
Canada
 at %36.
Moreover
,television is another way to access the
news
 at %40 in
Canada
,just ahead of
Australia
 at %37.
In contrast
,populations do not tend to listen to Radio to get the
news
at
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%7 and %2 in
Canada
 and
Australia
,respectively.
In addition
,the proportion of using printed
news
 is %14 in
Canada
 which is halved in
Australia
 at %7.
additionally
,a tiny fraction of different ways for accessing the
new
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news
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 is not specified at %3 and %2 in
Canada
 and
Australia
,respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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