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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show Lynwich
College
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 from 2006 and
it's
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its
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 development today
Overall
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 the main
college
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buildings
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 have stayed the same
however
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 to accommodate what has been modified to a centralized road network to provide ease of access to the various
buildings
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 which was lacking in the past.
Subsequently
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, there are now fewer trees and more
buildings
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. In the present-day the library used to be next to the car park.
College
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buildings
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 1 and 2 are still there, a few trees in the southwest area of the land have been cut in order to shift the library where it used to be next to the car park Now it is between the two
college
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buildings
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. A sports Centre has been constructed,
in addition
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 to the original sports field. A new cafeteria has been constructed in the Centre of the campus. In the past, the
college
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 was only easily accessible by car. Now, the
college
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 has safe storage for bikes and a new bus stop has been constructed adjacent to the main road

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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