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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? what could be disadvantages to being self employed?

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Today, more and more adults decide to work independently rather than being hired by a corporation.
This
 essay will first suggest that people's increased desire for freedom could be the main reason for
this
 phenomenon. Despite the mass high interest in self-employment, it actually has its own downside
such
 as negatively
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 someone's psychological well-being. Recent research studies have found that the majority of people in
this
 modern society demand a much more flexible lifestyle compared to their previous generations.
Due to
 that reason, almost 90% of Gen Z decided to be self-employed.
That is
 why we now have occupations like
influencer
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,
YouTuber
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YouTubers
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, or
vlogger
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.
Although
this
 career path may lead to lots of freedom compared to
the
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conventional office jobs, being self-employed might force a person to spend much more time working even harder which usually causes a higher stress level.
Additionally
, being self-employed often means that there
is
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 no fixed working hours, and those who work with random working hours are usually facing the frightening feeling of uncertainty. To
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, many youngsters are now choosing to be self-employed rather than to work in a certain institution. The reason for
this
 change is the different way of living expectations growing among the youth. Even though it is a popular decision,
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relevant specific examples
Ensure that all points made are fully developed with clear and specific examples. Although you mentioned influencers and YouTubers as examples of self-employment, try to provide more detailed contexts or additional career options to support your point.
logical structure
Work on paragraph transitions to create smoother progressions between ideas. This will improve the overall flow of the essay.
supported main points
Make sure to address all parts of the prompts in a balanced way. While you've addressed the reasons and disadvantages of self-employment well, the transitions between ideas might need a bit more attention.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the points discussed.
complete response
You have provided a thorough and complete response to the question, covering both the reasons for and the disadvantages of self-employment.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas presented are clear and you have shown a good understanding of the topic. Your use of modern occupations like influencers and YouTubers is illustrative and current.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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