•It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is beer in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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I believe that

people

who live in big cities have more opportunities than the

people

who live in the countryside

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, the

people

who live in the countryside have a limited number of schools,

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they don't have the best education

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to the big cities.

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another perspective, I find it easier to live in a small town, everyone knows each other because of their small community, each place is near the other which is great actually because there won't be any traffic,

also

it's so serene there, and I think living in

such

environment will make you a calm person but other than that I wouldn't choose to live there In my personal experience, I live in a big city where everything is noisy and moves fast, the traffic is terrible, and it's always crowded. Yet

people

here tend to help each other which makes it beautiful,

also

there are a lot of cafes and restaurants and many places to go to. We have huge buildings which I love, and the beaches, Living in the countryside is easier, but not the easier the better

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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187 words

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