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The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table describes information about how many people were engaged
on
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 5 different physical activities in Australia from 2001 to 2009. The most significant facts to emerge from the table are that the number of running participants showed an upward trend over the period
while
 people who
were
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joined in cycling experienced a downward trend. Another interesting point is that cycling activity had the highest participator in the first period. Looking at the details, people who joined on running activity just stood at 1.4
million
 next
this
 increased gradually from 1,7 to 2,2
million
 in 2009 with the biggest percentage changes at 156%.
Whereas
, aerobics and tennis had similar trends which achieved growth of approximately 11% and 15%, with 1,5 and 1
million
 in 2001 to 1,7 and 1,2
million
 participators in 2009 respectively.
On the other hand
, cycling and swimming had the biggest
participants
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 in 2001 at 4,5 and 3,7
million
.
Then
, from 2005 to 2009 witness that there was a
fall
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falling
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 number in 2009 from 3,1 to 3,6
million
on
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in
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 cycling and from 3,8 to 3,3
million
on
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 swimming.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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