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Some people believe that it is better language students in small classes.Other think the number of people in classes does not matter. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #language #students #classes #matter
People have different views about the effectiveness of small
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 rather than working together.
While
 there are some benefits to studying independently,l believe that group learning is usually more
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effective
. On the one hand,
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they are enhancing their self-confidence and working independently in their
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It is clear that
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 their cognitive thinking by training in small
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 they can find out more challenges and origin
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 the other hand, it is perhaps even more important to prepare
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 future that require teamwork.In the workplace, more
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 skills are much more useful than
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attitude that l believe schools had better foster in young people.
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clearly.Undeniably,many
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,studying in small groups that productive but it seems to me that a team working attitude is much more
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desirable
 in large groups.
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