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the pie charts give information about enegy consumption

the pie charts give information about enegy consumption
The pie charts compare the different sources of energy production in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, more than half of the proportion
allocated
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 to gas and coal,
while
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, other items
include
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including
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 Petro, nuclear and
other
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others
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 formed the remaining sources. Looking first of all at gas, coal and Petro, they shared
similar
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a similar
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 percentage
to
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of
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 producing energy (around 30% for each) in 1995 which gas and coal together had a slight increase in 2005,
whereas
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, Petro experienced a considerable decrease
about
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of about
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 20% in the same year. In 1995,
the
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apply
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nuclear energy was responsible for almost 6% of whole production and the other
source
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sources
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 made up approximately 5% which each
one
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grew gradually and reached
to
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nearly one-tenth in 2005.

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