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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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We all know that unemployemt is
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always
 there for some
reasons
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, but developed countries
have
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will provide
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benefits
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the government
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 and
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 them to do community service
to
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 other
people
 which
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may be
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benificial
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beneficial
 in one way but if we see other way it may not be
the
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 good thing. So
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 discuss that in detail in the following paragraph. Some countries are providing more
benifits
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benefits
 for
the
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apply
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job seekers or jobless
people
 and expecting them to do community service in return,
this
 may be
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beneficial
 for other
people
 but
at
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he
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 end there
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 be any skilled workers to invent new technology or experience
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 world.
people
 will get more lazy when getting free money. Maybe it might be helpful for retired
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individual
individuals
. but I disagree that it
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 help long-term job seekers in their personal life. on the other ha
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Improve the introduction by clearly stating your position on the topic and providing a roadmap for the essay. This will help set the context for your arguments.
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Work on paragraph development. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea, supported by relevant examples and explanations to fully develop the argument.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
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Conclude the essay by summarizing the main points discussed and restating your position more clearly. This will help to provide a sense of closure.
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The essay attempts to tackle a complex topic and shows an understanding of multiple perspectives.
logical
The use of contrasting viewpoints in the body of the essay indicates an understanding of the issue's complexity.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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