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You work for a small company. You need to arrange for some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: > explain why you want to take time off work > give details of how long you will be away > suggest how you will make up for the lost time ​Write at least 150 words.

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Dear James I am
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, a senior technical ,
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 am writing
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 email to inform you about my annual leaves . My
sister
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 nanny,
she
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will get married next month .it will be set up on 26
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august
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 2024
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 Sydney.
Therefore
,
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 have asked for my vacation for 2
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 15
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 to 30
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 because
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 will help my sister to Decision set up her wedding and my family is so excited to meet her after 3 years.
However
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 am going to my sister . I was told
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 to respond
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 project
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 the details about my work . If you have any
question
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also
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contact
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0457390692
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on 0457390692
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 . Thank you for
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 advance
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cooperation
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 faithfully Nat
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure correct grammar and punctuation throughout your letter to improve the logical structure and readability.
greeting and closing
Make sure to address your reader respectfully and use appropriate closing lines to improve the overall tone and coherence.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, ensuring a logical flow of information.
task achievement
Expanding on how you will manage your current tasks while on leave can make your response more complete.
task achievement
You clearly stated the reason for your leave and provided specific dates.
task achievement
You included a contact person and provided your own contact number for any queries, which demonstrates responsibility.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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