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The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below
depict
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 the outcome of
inquiry
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the inquiry
an inquiry
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. The inquiry discussed
on
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what
europe
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European
 and
USA
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US
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citizen
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citizens
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consideration
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 to be the leading cause of
business
 success. Approximately 38
percent
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per cent
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 of
american
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Americans
 think that the personality of the director and how the
business
managed
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 is the leading cause of successful
business
.
Furthermore
, almost 40
percent
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 of
european
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European
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 consider the single most important factor is how the
business
 is managed too. For the least affecting factor, around 3% of
USA
citizen
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citizens
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 believe
that is
 the political situation,
while
european
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 believe that
external
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the external
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 factor is the least, with 5% people
agree
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 on that. The distribution of answers from
this
 survey
are
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 quite similar,
however
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 there are 2 categories that have very different
response
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responses
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 between
USA
 and Europe. Those categories include
political
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the political
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 situation and personality of
director
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the director
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. The number of european believe
political
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the political
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 situation affect
business
 accomplishment is approximately 4 times of the
american
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Americans
.
Moreover
, in
personality
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the personality
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 of
director
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the director
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 category, almost twice of percentage of people consider that in
USA
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the USA
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 compared to Europe.
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