The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Write at least 150 words. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant?

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

Write at least 150 words.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant?
The picture of ethanol production shows how
this
biofuel is produced. It can be seen that
this
circle starts from Energies, which are given by plants and trees and how it is changed into
the
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Carbon Dioxide. At
first,
Energies,
such
as sunlight and carbon dioxide are attracted by plants and trees.
Next,
by harvesting they are sent for pre-processing, which prepers cellulose. At the next stage, they are processed and changed to the sugars and after
that
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some microbes are added. The final step
,
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includes how they are used by vehicles, like
plane
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and cars and the fumes produced the Carbon Dioxide.
To sum up
,
production
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of ethanol is begun by energies, which are used by jungles and after a
while
they return to the air.
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