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The bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides key information about the countries that were ranked as the top ten for electricity
production
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 and
consumption
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 in 2021. The units are measured in
billion
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kWh
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that China had the highest level of
production
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 and
consumption
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.
In addition
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, among these countries, 9 of them produced more than what they consumed,
whereas
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 just Germany showed a higher number of
consumption
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 compared with
production
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.
According to
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 what is shown, China and
US
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the US
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 were the most
region
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 that produced and consumed electricity with
production
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 digits of 5348 and 4009
billion
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KWh
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, and usage numbers of 5322 and 3806
billion
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KWh
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, Russia, Japan, and India showed modest figures
of
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for
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production
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 with 1057, 936.8 and 871
billion
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KWh
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 respectively. In terms of Canada, France, and Brazil they all produced approximately 600 b
KWh
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,
while
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 they almost used 500
billion
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kWh
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 of electricity.
Moreover
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, Germany consumed 65.9
billion
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kWh
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 more than what they produced.
Finally
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, Korea. Rep. almost had an equivalent amount of
production
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 and
consumption
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, and it was nearly 459
billion
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kWh
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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