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The bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar
chat
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chart
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provide
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an information
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information
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 about the most ten
countries
 that produce and consume
an
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electricity
 in the year 2021. Units are measured
billion
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in billion
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Kwh
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kWh
Overall
, It can be seen that
chine
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China
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 and the United
state
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States
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were
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are
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 the
most
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apply
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countries
 that both produce and consume
an
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apply
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electricity
.
While
,
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apply
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 Korea
was
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 the lowest amount of
electricity
. The
producation
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production
 and consumption in
china
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China
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 were more than 5,000
millions
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million
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kwh
. The same amount of
an
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apply
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electricity
 was generated and used in Russia.
In addition
, Japan, India, and Canada generate more
electricity
 compared to consumption.
Furthermore
, about 5.000
millions
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million
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Kwh
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kWh
 of
electricity
 was provided in three
countries
incliding
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including
france
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France
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, Brazil, and
germany
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Germany
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. It seems that using of
electricity
 was less approximately 4000
billions
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billion
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Kwh
 , except in Germany .
To sum up
, the production and
using
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 of
electricity
was
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apply
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varies
along
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in
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 these
countries
,but highly in the United
state
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States
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 and China.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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