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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree or disaagree with this statement?

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I agree with
this
 statement, I believe that television cannot replace the book as a learning tool. Kids nowadays tend to escape reality by using electronic devices which leads us to the main problem, Their parents must learn how to communicate with their
child
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, And teach them how to be more aware of what is around them.
Because when
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 they realize that life is more than just about a big screen, It will help them to see the outside world even better, and they will be thrilled to learn new things. that's why I suggest
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screen-time
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 for your child, perhaps for every thirty minutes the kid
spend
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 time watching cartoons, they must read a book or study for thirty minutes as well.
In addition
, they have to do their chores or do some other activities Similar to drawing or painting, That will help reduce their stress and focus on other stuff in a healthy way. A study stated that when you replace electronics with hobbies, It releases anxiety and depression. From my personal experience, I tried it, and it worked Now
i'm
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 full of energy yet more calm, I recommend it.
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